Make your own verse

[Mace]

So for anyone that enjoys writing lyrics, here is your spot to toss em out n get some feedback, I got about 50+ written's in the vault but I'mma come up w something new everytime I post in here.

 

[Mace]

Here’s a nice freestyle beat if anyone wants to give it a shot with some lyrics over it

XXL

[Mace]

Been a while since I made this and honestly I feel so much better after this. after finally getting that off my chest n saying it "out loud" I feel so much better bout myself to where I'm not as nervous or scared to show my writing, if you like it, amazing, if not, all good. I'm happy to finally be able to share more of myself. 

 

So this is the beat I'm writing off Here I'm a fan of the more, less intense beat's personally.(AKA. 808's not curb stomping my ears) I'd listen over the beat first before the lyric's, just so you can get an idea of the rhythm & lyric pacing. This ones a bit shorter, only a 1:45 beat, hence maybe stretching the stem's out if I buy it. I'd jump in a 0:12 if no intro but it's pretty short anyways so, mybe a humming intro. The hook also could be taken out and just be a x2 Chorus since the beat's not 2-3mins long

 

Chorus-

"In my head where I keep the dark thoughts

I can feel it all day, legs tired mind rots

mixing oxy w crush numbed out, hit the spot

but I gotta stay focused live my life till I drop"

 

Verse-

"my demons follow me ya, everywhere I go

but I'll be damned never listen to em like I'm told

kick they ass right out my head, kick they ass right out my bed

kick they ass right out my house, prolly find their way to my first spouse

new found courage to live my life, re-claimed my heart try to live right

I still fuck up, now n again though cause when it's hard I search for a benzo

I, promise I'll try n stop, hope you don't wanna see me drop

I don't wanna be jus another numba, OD'd on the floor ya that life's a bummer

tryin new thing's, drive fast I'm a stunta 

ego gettin bigga than a fuckin boosted humma

but I gotta stay humble, can't gas myself up

cause shit's expensive like a humma, full tank $200 bucks

room gettin dirty gotta clean my shit up

like my wallet n my money gotta build that shit up

on this road by my lone, walk this path on my own

hopefully when I reach the end my mind'll finally be at home"

 

Hook- 

"In my head where I keep the dark thoughts

I can feel it all day, legs tired mind rots

feeling sick, trynna cope, light my bowl's w some rope

think bout how far I've come from before I tried poke"

 

Chorus-

"In my head where I keep the dark thoughts

I can feel it all day, legs tired mind rots

mixing oxy w crush numbed out, hit the spot

but I gotta stay focused live my life till I dr-op"

                                                                                                                                                                            

So I just finished writing that bout, 20ish mins ago and it took me bout 30-35mins to write & revise to be relatively happy w it. If anyone has any serious suggestions for revision's I'm open to criticism